| You could have improved it in a couple of places and chosen better wording in a some other places, but for a ninth grade project it wouldn't be too bad. I wouldn't exactly give it an A because it could have been improved, like perhaps keeping up a rhythm because it seems like you tried, but it didn't quite work out. Another thing you could have done was add a bit to it, maybe give examples of the better times. Also, the unhappy face turning into a full-blown smile about to pop of joy sends the opposite message, and I would suggest it would be the other way around because the poem is supposed to be sad, yet it looks like you're getting happier and happier. | 
