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Originally Posted by FireWrath  Looks like this has some potential, but the wording of it loses its purpose. It sounds like you want the children to be educated, yet there are grammatical errors along with the improperly used words which just confused me at first attempt to read it. There's not an actual rhyme scheme that I could catch, which I'm not a fan of, even though it does rhyme. This reminds me of some sort of rap, as opposed to an actual poem, and it has that "ghetto/street" feel to it, even though by the sounds of the poem you're trying to sway away from it. |
I usually try to write raps but I call them poems because it feels weird callling them raps. towards the end I was trying to give examples but I messed it up.
thanks for the feed back
