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Originally Posted by Xephia  line one makes no sense. Also, there is NO rhythm. Try giving each line an equal, or nearly equal, amount of syllables. The second half isn't so bad. I like the last three lines.
Use a thesaurus. |
Thank you for the constructive criticism. To be honest it's my second poem ever. I don't know what to do though. Help?
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[00:36] iClitoris: <3 I'm good at cramming and such
Those who want to live, let them fight, and those who do not
want to fight in this world of eternal struggle do not deserve to
live.
