| This poem is very short and basic, which is fine, except it doesn't give off much of a feeling. It feels like you're just braking complete thoughts for somebody young that doesn't understand you. There's no beat to, and it has rhythm. Poor vocabulary and word choice don't bring out the finer things in the poem, either. I do; however, like the fact that you stuck with the same length for the majority of your couplets.
RelativelyCool, I really hope Bunneh attacks you
b-edit:
Lawl. I did. xD
Last edited by Bunneh; 07-22-2008 at 10:18 AM..
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