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Old 07-01-2008, 11:11 AM   #1 (permalink)
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Broken.. Anger...

Broken Anger.

As for each day that I wake or don't wake,
I feel this pain within me that just won't go away.
My lungs feel empty and my heart is lamenting.
Oh, how I wish that I could change this resenting.

Words thrown at me that mean so little to me,
but deep down inside they eat and claw at me.
I wish that I could just put this to an end,
for you say some things that make my heart never mend.

I care for you deeply, but you do not see it,
I feel like I'm empty and you're just conceited.
You must understand, but you fail to see,
a person can only take so much and this is it for me.

Broken and torn inside I pull myself away slowly,
to then in the end see the precipice before me.
Promises you make fade quicker than the light of a candle,
the things that have happened are too much to handle.

I try and I try to make it get through to you.
Someday you'll see that it will be ado.
You have dug me a hole and now you've fallen in,
But I will soon get out, so hurry up and dig.






To my mother.
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Old 07-01-2008, 11:14 AM   #2 (permalink)
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Nice.
I'm not being sarcastic or anything, but this was really good.
I can tell where your coming from, and I don't see that in a lot of poems
Good Job, Lil.
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Old 07-01-2008, 08:15 PM   #3 (permalink)
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I like it. I know how it is to feel broken and angry.
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I love you poem it amazing.
It really something to get someone to see a understanding view of this poem.
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I love it. Good vocabulary, good rhymes (Not great, but good!). I have a few of my own, but I haven't really added them to this forum. Good luck in writing!
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