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 [CQ] The Night I Lost My Angel
Old 09-10-2009, 08:09 PM   #1 (permalink)
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[CQ] The Night I Lost My Angel

A little something I made, it's a short story of how things can change in a matter of seconds... specially with a loved one, it's best to say all the things you have to tell them than lose them and regret forever not letting them know.

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if you see any typos or grammar errors please, forgive me.

Every night I remember your warm touch, your beautiful smile, your innocent eyes. Yes, I remember how time seemed to stop while I watched you sleep right next to me… But tonight it's a special night because there is no moon in the sky, what would I give to have those moments back.

But now you’re gone and there is nothing I can do to change that. I remember the last time we talked, how you were crying because you had a bad day, I wish I could go back in time and hold you in my arms and tell you that everything would be ok, but instead I sat there frozen without saying a word and so, you left, still crying and now more because I was not able to comfort you.

You ran downstairs to the garage, in your car you called to my cell phone but I didn’t answer because I was trying to find you, in the message you said “I love you honey, but right now I have to leave I’ll talk to you later” and you backed up as soon as you saw me but you didn’t notice the other car who was coming, and it hit you, I watched as your car flipped and turned in the front yard, the guy on the other car was fine but you had a really bad injury on your head. We called the ambulance but by the time they arrived you were death in my arms…

I still remember... it was a moonless night, the night I lost my angel, it’s been three years now and everyday when I go to bed I remember how you died in my arms… Monique my darling, I miss you and for ever you’ll be in my heart…
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Hmmm I like it. There's no deep wording to it, nothing that really makes you think... but I think that works in this case. It helps the reader be able to really understand and feel the emotion. Nice one overall!
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Hmmm I like it. There's no deep wording to it, nothing that really makes you think... but I think that works in this case. It helps the reader be able to really understand and feel the emotion. Nice one overall!
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