finisher?

[Super_simple]

I need help on finishing this very short poem.
First you might want some background so you know what I'm talking about. In the seventh grade I made a poem on sweet potatoes(don't ask) I was jokingly laughed at so i made most of a poem to be about that. Some of my friends liked it but yea. This is the poem.(criticism advised =p)

One time a boy wrote a poem,
So people would start to know him,
It ended up bad,
Potatoes are sad,
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[Bunneh]

I'd edit the first two lines to fit the rhythm better. Perhaps something like:

One time a boy wrote a poem,
So others could see his mind roam
It ended up bad,
Potatoes are sad,
And their mocking left him without home

Or words to that effect. Dunno; for limericks, it's very important to keep a strict rhyming scheme.

[Super_simple]

i see thanks for the advice very helpful ^^

[whispering eye]

wow! you two are good in writing poems.. keep it up guys!

[shakes]

Or you could go haiku style and be like

Boy wrote a poem
Untill he figured out that
Potatoes are sad


Haha, I don't know. I personally like haikus.

[Super_simple]

lol arent haikus supposed to be about nature?

[shakes]

Potatoes are a plant, and plants are like, a part of nature.

I'm not sure if thats what the japanese were talking about, but whatever

[Super_simple]

ah nice connection ;)