A poem on the Holocaust

[Wilfukguys]

lmfao. thats the gayest thing i have ever heard. How would they go about explaining the war and all that shit then?

[sidespin]

I really don't know xD, maybe they think the war was all part of the conspiracy lmao.

[Theebomb1080]

Originally Posted by Wilfuk

Nah, he was being serious.
Hes just a dumb fuck /b/ however, and thinks hes all tough and shit.
Just ignore the /b/ fag.

Lol I never said I was a /b/tard and also I think I'm tough and shit? You're the one talking shit lol

[Condemned92]

I love that it's the best thing I've ever heard with the few poems I have read and heard.

[Gumtr33]

I'm not a huge fan of it, but you're only fourteen, not saying that younger people can't write good poetry, but ah, school project. I agree with the people that cited a few discrepancies in form, meter, etc.

When I did Holocaust poetry when I was fourteen, ah geez, it was bad. See, we had read "Night" by Elie Weisel. And my mother and I (I told her all about it) couldn't get over it, especially the savagery that comes with the often unspeakable horror the victims had to endure, and especially during the chapter where family members were killing one another for a few crumbs of bread.

My point is that these events are difficult to put into words. We found ourselves joking about a title, "Dead Over Bread" just because the events I was writing about were so, so very bad, that I had to laugh before I cried.

So I commend you for putting your work up.

[Theebomb1080]

Originally Posted by Gumtr33

I'm not a huge fan of it, but you're only fourteen, not saying that younger people can't write good poetry, but ah, school project. I agree with the people that cited a few discrepancies in form, meter, etc.

When I did Holocaust poetry when I was fourteen, ah geez, it was bad. See, we had read "Night" by Elie Weisel. And my mother and I (I told her all about it) couldn't get over it, especially the savagery that comes with the often unspeakable horror the victims had to endure, and especially during the chapter where family members were killing one another for a few crumbs of bread.

My point is that these events are difficult to put into words. We found ourselves joking about a title, "Dead Over Bread" just because the events I was writing about were so, so very bad, that I had to laugh before I cried.

So I commend you for putting your work up.

I've just got to tasy that was a really good post. I know what you mean though about the difficult to put into words. It's the same way with me loving somebody I just don't know how to express it all too well.

[sidespin]

Originally Posted by Gumtr33

I'm not a huge fan of it, but you're only fourteen, not saying that younger people can't write good poetry, but ah, school project. I agree with the people that cited a few discrepancies in form, meter, etc.

When I did Holocaust poetry when I was fourteen, ah geez, it was bad. See, we had read "Night" by Elie Weisel. And my mother and I (I told her all about it) couldn't get over it, especially the savagery that comes with the often unspeakable horror the victims had to endure, and especially during the chapter where family members were killing one another for a few crumbs of bread.

My point is that these events are difficult to put into words. We found ourselves joking about a title, "Dead Over Bread" just because the events I was writing about were so, so very bad, that I had to laugh before I cried.

So I commend you for putting your work up.

I was actually only 13 when I wrote this poem , yes these events are very difficult to put into words. I can understand what you mean buy laughing before crying because it's just impossible to understand how somethings like this ever happened.

[Gumtr33]

Oooh, a young writer.

I get you. Possible, I think, to understand the politics and social unrest and hell of war, but then when you get down to the holocaust, just about impossible.

Keep writing!

[Theebomb1080]

Originally Posted by sidespin

I was actually only 13 when I wrote this poem , yes these events are very difficult to put into words. I can understand what you mean buy laughing before crying because it's just impossible to understand how somethings like this ever happened.

I know. It's pretty absurd that the U.S. watched it all happen for so long before stepping in to help out.

[narcolepsie.]

i don't mean to sound rude or anything, but the poem wasn't exactly to my taste; it's a good poem, i can tell, but just not my sorta thing ^^ if you know what i mean? xD

i liked the "never give up" bit, which i thought was very good, but i found the general feel of the poem was /forced/. it seemed fake. the words themselves were sad, but again the rhyming made it just appear artificial. the rhyming scheme doesn't work with the poem, and detracts from the meaning of it all too much. it also seems like you were trying too hard to make it rhyme, when it should look easy and... "flowy" XD

a good effort though ^^ well done~ ;3