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07-13-2008, 05:48 AM
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Join Date: May 2007 Location: My howse Age: 15 Posts: 173 Rep Power: 4 | Short Poems [CQ] I wrote these while at Summer Camp. It's a Military Camp, and that's pretty much what inspired me.
Here ja go Queer Isn’t it queer How a new place will give Off a new radiance, and a new way to live? Isn’t it queer That new places and things Give new feelings, stones and strong wings? Isn’t it queer How when you think hard Your memories escape And carry a guard? Isn’t it queer That all that you do Never comes back But seems all so true? Isn’t it queer That life seems alive When all you take part in Is a short-ending strive? Isn’t it queer How looks can deceive? Why is this so? You’ll never retrieve. Isn’t it sad That you’ll never not die? How life always ends An eye for an eye? Everything’s queer, No matter the way, But hold everything dear Hold it to stay. Box Boxed up inside opinions traffic forth, Bubbling in such decision as to perfect the mind. Every thought carries it’s own thoughtful worth Inside the mind things swivel and wind. Heartbreak Doesn’t matter who you are Doesn’t matter where you live A passion you hold Is the love you give When the love breaks apart Or ceases to start Heartbreak occurs A rip of the heart And tearing to pieces Mental distress Love decreases Terror excess You don’t know how You don’t know why The love you gave is no longer a vow It’s gone on too long The sadness is here Depression occurs And death is so near But take back your love Take back those who lay dear Never give up Always endear. Here’s a poem that I turned into class for a project. It was posted before but hell I don’t care. Across plains of never ending gaiety
Aside the hills of rapture and hilarity
Far from the rhapsody of joy
In lieu of this great happiness
Amidst the crevices of eternal anguish
Although cloaked from vision
Down inside the abyss of terror
Failing for the slightest fluorescence
Athwart containing no boundaries of evil
Despite the sadness of these terrors
Regardless of these vile things
Before the engulfment of you
Upon your final minutes
Within your agony inducing fear
During your prayers of hope,
Prior to death,
In spite of belief,
Aside from acclaim,
Into the realization
Via the absence of a guardian
Of the absence of a guardian
Tempora mutantur, nos et mutamur in illis Additional notes to a comment on confusion in the lines of Aside the hills of rapture and hilarity
Far from the rhapsody of joy
The dark area of which I mention later on in the poem, is aside the hills of rapture and hilarity, which you quoted. I see how it can sound strange, but the dark area is not only aside the hills of rapture and hilarity, but also far from the rhapsody of joy. Next to, but far away from it. Quite like how people refer to people five miles away as their neighbor, because, technically, they are their neighbor, no matter the distance.... Sometimes they use the different definition of neighbor, the one I highlighted in yellow. In this case, you are referring to the second definition of aside, the one highlighted in yellow, I am using the first and third one. Anyways, I was trying to write a poem about my agnostic beliefs against god. The poem tries to imply that the god that religion speaks of made the world appear to be great fun and joy, but there was still evil in the world. They didn't notice and when they do, they realize that there is no god. God is the guardian, and only without a guardian, may you realize this, because only true evil can hand you the apprehension.
Thanks for the comments, this wasn't copy pasta (although delicious), but your comments make it seem as if someone cool wrote it. ^.^ Thanks.
More comments appreciated. Will work on changing that part, too, my English teacher loved this thing!
a·side /əˈsaɪd/ Pronunciation Key - [uh-sahyd] Pronunciation Key
–adverb
1. on or to one side. 2. to or at a short distance apart; away from some position or direction: to turn aside; to move the chair aside.
3. away from one's thoughts or consideration: to put one's cares aside.
neigh·bor /ˈneɪbər/
–noun
1. a person who lives near another.
2. a person or thing that is near another.
3. one's fellow human being: to be generous toward one's less fortunate neighbors. 4. a person who shows kindliness or helpfulness toward his or her fellow humans: to be a neighbor to someone in distress.
5. (used as a term of address, esp. as a friendly greeting to a stranger): Tell me, neighbor, which way to town?
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07-27-2008, 04:25 PM
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Join Date: Jul 2008 Location: O_o Posts: 237 Rep Power: 1 | It's not short. D; | |
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07-27-2008, 04:31 PM
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07-29-2008, 11:56 AM
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