well it call death

[poweranddecption]

Too some people death is hard to realize. Too others it isn't , but do other's even remember those time with that person or they just wanted to meet them cause they felt like it.Even with people like that they have other that have love one that die they also cry every day to have a other chance to see them or to love them or try to prevent them from that incident where they died at.I wouldn't Know what to do I probally shield my tears from my love one or should i hold it in.I don't really know.

[Xavaligion]

1- You used the wrong type of to.
2- Uhhh...... Nothing Flowed or Linked with each other.
Try harder.

[poweranddecption]

man i did this was the first thing i ever wrote and this is not a peom it was like me trying to express it in a type of way

[Xavaligion]

Dude. I just said it needs Improvement, Get over it.

[poweranddecption]

I know i do need to improve

[Xavaligion]

Ok now just drink a big glass of improvement and repost it.

[poweranddecption]

lol I wont do that I would just make a new one

[Xavaligion]

Originally Posted by poweranddecption

lol I wont do that I would just make a new one

Ok.

[Fortunato]

Play nice, Xava.

power, now that you have a basic thought typed out and on paper, I'd say use this as inspiration for another more-developed piece of literature. Like, channel the feelings that you're trying to express here into poems, or into a story of some kind. This is a good first step for brainstorming, but now you need to do something with it. :3

[poweranddecption]

thanks alots