Summer Festival Poetry Contest

[sidespin]

You'll do well Xephia! But now you have me to watch out for xD.

Jk, your probably better at poetry than I am.

[Xephia]

I doubt it. I don't often write poetry. In fact, I haven't written in years. That poem I submitted for POTW was the first I can remember in a very long time.

Here is my sonnet. I'm not sure how much I like it, but I don't know if I'll have the time to rewrite it. It's about Litha, the Pagan Summer ritual, which is performed on June the 24th.

The rhyming scheme is that of an English Sonnet (/ represents a new stanza): a-b-a-b / c-d-c-d / e-f-e-f / g-g

Summer's Fool

The breeze so sweet, so cool but warm
The sky an endless, cloudless black
Save on the horizon – coming dawn
Stealing the sky - to take it back


A Coven, in the night looks bleakly
At the stars – The season's fool
The Witches dance is gay and blithely
To celebrate King Holly's rule


The Litha fires burn low and gold
The King of Oak gives up his throne
The dance repeats itself threefold
Till just the children dance alone


So ends our late Midsummer night
With the coming of day's blessed light

[sidespin]

Very nice job , I haven't started mine quite yet.

I keep putting off finishing an English project atm, and I need to go to bed :/ right now I'll only have five hours of sleep lmao.

[Husky]

Originally Posted by Xephia

I doubt it. I don't often write poetry. In fact, I haven't written in years. That poem I submitted for POTW was the first I can remember in a very long time.

Here is my sonnet. I'm not sure how much I like it, but I don't know if I'll have the time to rewrite it. It's about Litha, the Pagan Summer ritual, which is performed on June the 24th.

The rhyming scheme is that of an English Sonnet (/ represents a new stanza): a-b-a-b / c-d-c-d / e-f-e-f / g-g

Summer's Fool

The breeze so sweet, so cool but warm
The sky an endless, cloudless black
Save on the horizon – coming dawn
Stealing the sky - to take it back


A Coven, in the night looks bleakly
At the stars – The season's fool
The Witches dance is gay and blithely
To celebrate King Holly's rule


The Litha fires burn low and gold
The King of Oak gives up his throne
The dance repeats itself threefold
Till just the children dance alone


So ends our late Midsummer night
With the coming of day's blessed light

That was really good as always, Xephia. Although the words on lines 1 and 3 don't really rhyme at all =/. Either I'm reading it wrong, or it is like that on purpose. And it doesn't match your rhyming scheme.

[Bunneh]

I updated the entrants list. :3

Just got back from Orlando with some friends. I'll be around until fairly late tonight.

[Xephia]

Originally Posted by (+-Emo-Husky-+)

That was really good as always, Xephia. Although the words on lines 1 and 3 don't really rhyme at all =/. Either I'm reading it wrong, or it is like that on purpose. And it doesn't match your rhyming scheme.

Oh, darn. When I read it aloud they do, but that might just be my New Zealand accent. I'll edit it

And thanks

[FireWrath]

Here's something I wrote in about five or ten minutes.

Oh summer I really do hate thee
Every time you get near I'm in pain
I hurt in my heart, I hurt in my knee
I'd rather be hit by an oncoming train

My blood pressure goes up
My head starts to spin fast
So I lay in bed sipping tea in a cup
Your heatwaves are always unsurpassed

My chest wants to cave in
My throat gets too dry
Feels like I'm in hell for my sin
Feels like I'm floating in the blue sky

While my stomach is ready to hurl
My chin starts to quiver
Tears dripping down as if I'm a girl
And now it hurts down in my liver

Completely covered in sweat
Laying here with a busted A/C
If you think I'll pass out that's a good bet
Cold water should help but there's no guarantee

Summer I do truly hate thee
Now I just feel woozy
Room is so dark I can't even see
Puking blood like shot by an uzi

Summer that's why I hate thee
It's the waking up in the smell
It's the pain that everyone could see
It's the agony I won't even see in hell

The heat I cannot outrun
This hot season seems like a fluke
Though swimming is fun
But not if it's in your own puke

Summer gets my blood pressure very high sometimes, and I puke often during this hot season, which should explain a bit of this. I went out of my normal writing style for this because it's 3:00 am, but that should tell you why I love summer... You don't have to point out what I did wrong with this one, I already see it, but I'm not going to fix it just because I don't want to spend the time doing so. As much as I would love to win, I'd rather give somebody else a chance to if this five minute piece doesn't deserve the victory as-is. ;)

[lil]

Originally Posted by FireWrath

Here's something I wrote in about five or ten minutes.

Oh summer I really do hate thee
Every time you get near I'm in pain
I hurt in my heart, I hurt in my knee
I'd rather be hit by an oncoming train

My blood pressure goes up
My head starts to spin fast
So I lay in bed sipping tea in a cup
Your heatwaves are always unsurpassed

My chest wants to cave in
My throat gets too dry
Feels like I'm in hell for my sin
Feels like I'm floating in the blue sky

While my stomach is ready to hurl
My chin starts to quiver
Tears dripping down as if I'm a girl
And now it hurts down in my liver

Completely covered in sweat
Laying here with a busted A/C
If you think I'll pass out that's a good bet
Cold water should help but there's no guarantee

Summer I do truly hate thee
Now I just feel woozy
Room is so dark I can't even see
Puking blood like shot by an uzi

Summer that's why I hate thee
It's the waking up in the smell
It's the pain that everyone could see
It's the agony I won't even see in hell

The heat I cannot outrun
This hot season seems like a fluke
Though swimming is fun
But not if it's in your own puke

Summer gets my blood pressure very high sometimes, and I puke often during this hot season, which should explain a bit of this. I went out of my normal writing style for this because it's 3:00 am, but that should tell you why I love summer... You don't have to point out what I did wrong with this one, I already see it, but I'm not going to fix it just because I don't want to spend the time doing so. As much as I would love to win, I'd rather give somebody else a chance to if this five minute piece doesn't deserve the victory as-is. ;)

LMAO! Awesome writings, baby. But.. Shouldn't it Valdosta instead of summer? XD

[FireWrath]

Well the poem is supposed to be about summer :/ Though summer in Valdosta makes it even worse. I could have added another ten stanzas talking about sinuses, moisture, mosquitoes, rednecks, and the like. Lol

[sidespin]

Okay, enough procrastination xD, time to get to work.
I'll edit it in here once done.